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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they shiuld only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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 some people argue that university students should study whatever they like, others believe that they should only be allowed to study useful
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 that will be helpful to them in the future,
such
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 as those related to science, technology and engineering.
This
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 essay will discuss both perspectives before presenting my own personal view, which supports a balanced approach. On one hand, allowing students to study
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 they like can assist them in their present and future, learning about what they like the most and discovering which
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 can improve their potential.
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, studying
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 that require high talent
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such
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, such
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 as music, architecture,
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and mathematics
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mathematics
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 can be helpful to society and lead to a bright future and major discoveries without wasting their talent.
On the other hand
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, studying only the required
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 can improve their way of thinking
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and
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 gain new and useful skills to assist others in need.
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, learning about
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such
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 as engineering

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Write a full ending. Your essay stops in the middle, so your answer is not complete.
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Discuss both sides more evenly. The second side has very little detail.
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Give your own opinion more clearly in the body and in the ending.
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Use one clear main idea in each paragraph, then add a short example.
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Link ideas with simple words like 'first', 'also', 'for example', and 'in conclusion'.
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Make sure each sentence connects well to the next one. Some ideas stop too soon.
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Your introduction is clear and shows both views.
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You try to use examples to support your ideas.
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Your essay has a basic paragraph plan.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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