The bar graph below represents the data about the clubs joined by the people of two different age groups at a leisure center. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and makes comparisons where relevant. You should Club preferences by age range.

The following bar graph shows the number of

people

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of two different

age

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groups who joined different clubs — gardening, photography, fitness, arts and crafts, music/dance, and cycling — at a leisure

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, it can be seen from the chart that younger

people

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tended to participate in more clubs than did the older generations, except for the gardening and photography clubs. First of all, gardening is a popular

hobby

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for the 55-65

age

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group (55

people

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, only about 25

people

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from the 25-35

age

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group are interested in

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club

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it is interesting that the photography

club

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has the same number of members from both

age

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groups at 45. In terms of fitness,

this

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hobby

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seemed more popular among the 25-35 year olds (55 participants),

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only 50

elders

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of the elders

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preferred

this

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hobby

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. Moving on to the arts and crafts

club

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, like fitness, though it is not desirable among the elders (20 attendees),

this

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hobby

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is highly popular among teenagers (60

people

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). In regard to the music and dance

club

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, the number of its members from both

age

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groups was similar (53 younger

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and 50 elders).

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, cycling is the activity with the highest participation among teenagers.

However

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, it is the least popular activity among the old.

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Apr 4, 2026

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, age, hobby, club with synonyms.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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210 words

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The bar graph below represents the data about the clubs joined by the people of two different age groups at a leisure center. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and makes comparisons where relevant. You should Club preferences by age range.

Many museums and historical sites are mostly visited by foreign tourists, but not by local people. Why do you think it happens? What can be done to attract local people to these sites?

People from poor and rural backgrounds find it difficult to get a university education. Some people think that government should make it easier for them to enter universities. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents who educate their children themselves at home instead of sending them to school. Do you thing the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Currently children have less responsibilities than they had in the past some say this is a good change some argue that it had negative effect on children. Discuss both views and give your opinion based on your personal experience.

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers,should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.