some people think that employees should ensure a pleasant working environment so that workers feel valued and will therefore work hard. Others feel that employers should be more strict with employees and monitor them closely to ensure they work hard. What is your opinion?

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atmosphere

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might feel themselves in a perfect mood

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definitely there are still some drawbacks if we ponder.

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atmosphere might attract employers' enthusiasm for completing their work,

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because of emotional happiness

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clients will be

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fluent and

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. Definitely being strict should be included

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not mentally affecting,

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, minuses won't show their absence, flickering lights might injure

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of those who are in the building

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employers

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employers,

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as they work there for half of a day. And not only that peril but long

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appearance

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complex

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might create a difficulty for

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mistakes might be made.

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that issue can be fixed

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I still don't comprehend how, and I hope we will

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a way.

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strict might affect

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their thoughts, and they will be upset In

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I think decor mustn't be brainwashing

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its color which can cause mental pain

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ofcourse it needs to be less polluting

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suggest it would make workers feel appreciated.