The chart below gives information on the percentage of Canadians gave money to charitable organisations by age range for the years 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart
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provides data on the amount of canadians gave cash to
non-profitable
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non-profit
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organisations by age range for the years 2000 and 2015.
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, the most supporters in 2000
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35 to 49
year
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olds
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one and a half decades later, the biggest
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supporters
are 50 to 64
year
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olds. The young adults
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aged
between 18
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24
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year olds
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years
are the least contributors
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all the age gaps
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with a little above 30
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percent
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when we combine the years 2000 and 2015
and the most
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. The largest
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percentage of
benefactors
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beneficiaries
are in the age difference of 35 to 49
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middle aged individuals by the combine
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the years 2000 and 2015 nearly 75
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We can
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see that in the
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2000
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donors are declining slightly to almost 40
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to a little under 35
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. But in 2015, when people hit 65,
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people
want
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to be a donor with a drop of approximately 10
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percent
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words year, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • age range
  • charitable organisations
  • fluctuates
  • notable changes
  • participation
  • considerable decrease
  • contrast
  • consistent increase
  • middle age groups
  • peak
  • notable drop
  • shift
  • financial priorities
  • economic circumstances
  • demographic
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