The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014 .

The bar chart illustrates the data of ten different countries which made and used
electricity
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in 2014.
Overall
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, it was noticed that
china
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China
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was at
top
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the top
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in producing and consuming electric power
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on
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; on
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the other hand germany was
only
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the only
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the
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apply
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country
who
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that
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consumed more
electricity
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than its production. After discussing china USA was the next country which produce much
electricity
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its was approximately 4,099 ans its consumption was 3,866
which
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, which
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was
slighter low
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slightly lower
than production . Russia and
korea was only
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Korea were
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the
countries
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only countries
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which used and consumed power almost
equal
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equally
. India made
electricity
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almost 871kwh
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; however
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however
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however,
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it consumed only 698.8 Kwh If we discuss
about
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apply
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Canada and
Brazil
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Brazil,
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their production and consumption were
also
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at
same
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the same
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percentage .

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • megawatt-hours (MWh)
  • electricity grid
  • renewable energy sources
  • fossil fuels
  • energy efficiency
  • consumption patterns
  • power generation
  • industrial demand
  • residential use
  • transmission losses
  • energy imports
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • energy policy
  • capacity
  • infrastructure
  • demand and supply
  • electrification
  • energy security
  • grid reliability
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