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Writing Samples
Band 3

The chart below shows how much money is spent in the budget on different sectors by the UAE government in 2000.

The pie chart demonstrates how much money
is
Wrong verb form
was
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 expended on various sectors by the UAE government in the year 2000
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Overall
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Overall,
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it is clear that
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social
Correct article usage
the social
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 security AED sector
has
Wrong verb form
had
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 the
most
Correct word choice
highest
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 expenditure in the year
2000
Punctuation problem
2000,
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while
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housing
Correct article usage
the housing
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heritage
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, heritage
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and
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, and
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 environment AED held
the
Correct article usage
a
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 modest ratio

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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