Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

The price of petrol may significantly play a role in the ecological challenge. Rising prices of petrol can resolve environmental degradation. I believe that
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not only conserves natural habitats but
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avoids pollution. It is commonly believed that the price of oil can considerably assist users of vehicles in reducing public transportation
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is mainly because as long as users of private cars decline in using their cars, they will probably reduce carbon emissions.
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, the UK, where people use public transport or walk, is considered one of the most sustainable countries in global sustainability development.
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of
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, using public transport protects nature and saves plants.
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, other opinions of the above argument suggest that increasing the cost of fuel might help avoid environmental degradation. They support their argument by
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when the price of fossil oil rises
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individuals tend to use mass transit, which may help renewable energy sources,
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as reducing carbon emissions.
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, a lot of the developing countries' public transport,
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as motorail and buses, rely on protecting the environment.
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, the economic increase becomes one of investment in renewable energy and leads to the citizens' quality of life. In conclusion,
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more people find private cars useful and valuable, the more they
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contribute to the conservation of natural habitats and clean energy, which reflects on a decent life.

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Answer both parts more clearly. Say if you agree, disagree, or partly agree, and then give other ways to cut traffic and pollution.
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Make your main ideas easy to follow. Some sentences do not match the question about traffic.
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Use clearer examples. The UK example is not explained enough, and some examples are too general.
coherence and cohesion
Put one main idea in each body paragraph. Then add 2 or 3 lines to explain it.
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Use simple link words well: first, also, for example, as a result, in conclusion.
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Check sentence meaning. Some parts are hard to understand, so the flow becomes weak.
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You have a clear introduction and a clear ending.
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You use paragraphing, which helps the reader.
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You try to give examples and reasons in both body paragraphs.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • Discourage
  • Incentivize
  • Alternative energy
  • Public transportation
  • Lower-income
  • Carpool
  • Ride-sharing
  • Congestion
  • Urban planning
  • Pedestrian-friendly
  • Tax incentives
  • Electric and hybrid vehicles
  • Emissions standards
  • Cleaner vehicles
  • Congestion charges
  • Bicycle lanes
  • Sustainable
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