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Band 6

The chart below shows information about European people of different age groups who went to gym once a month or more between 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

In Europe, the line graph shows how many
people
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 of different ages went to the gym each year from 1990 to 2010.
Overall
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, rates went up for all
age
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 groups during the time period.
Additionally
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, the individuals in the 18-24
age
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 range showed the highest figures,
while
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people
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 who were over 45 recorded the lowest. In terms of specific details,
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the 18
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-24
age
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 group starts at 10% and
then
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 increases to 60%, followed by a bit of fluctuation in
the
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apply
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2006
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apply
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. 
Similarly
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, 25-34 years old individuals
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begin
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 at 8% and grow confidently, ending at 50% in the final year. Meanwhile,
35-44
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people aged 35- 44
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age
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people
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 start with 5% and gradually reaching 40% by the end.
In contrast
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,
people
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 aged over 45
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begin
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 at almost 0% and shows least change, finishing at 20%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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