The bar chart shows the percentages of the Canadian workforce in five major industries in 1850 and 2020.

The bar chart illustrates the proportions of people labouring in manufacturing, services, agriculture/fishing, construction, and energy/water fields in Canada in 1850 and 2020.

Overall

Linking Words

, service workers in Canada in 2020 recorded the highest percentage

in contrast

Linking Words

to those who worked in other industries in both years.

While

Linking Words

Canadians who participated in farming and fishing were considered minorities in 2020 ,

in addition

Linking Words

to those who took jobs in the power generation sector in both years. In 1850, labouring in the industrial production field and services was widespread in the country, with 36% working in the first sector, and 33% in the

second,

Linking Words

followed by 22% Canadians who carried out the agriculture and fisheries industry.

By contrast

Linking Words

, working in either construction or the renewable energy sector wasn't very common back

then

Linking Words

, with 5% site labourers, and just 3% individuals operating in the energy/water domain.

By comparison

Linking Words

, the services industry has flourished in 2020 with 81% employee, followed by those who laboured in fabrication and construction , which registered quite similar figures with 9% working in manufacturing and 8% in sites.

Whereas

Linking Words

working in cultivation and fishery wasn't popular in that year , with only 1%.

Likewise

Linking Words

, participants in the power line of business.

reeghalghofaily

Apr 8, 2026

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

▼

Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

▼

Do you want to check your IELTS essays?

Submit unlimited essays, letters and charts. Sign up right now and start improving your writing skills.

10
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

201 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

Topic Vocabulary:

trend
share
percent
rise
fall
grow
change
compare
overall
increase
decrease
highest
largest
smallest
more
less
year
old
new
reason
cause
why
then
now
but
and
for example
data
table
chart
farm
farmers
farm work
service(s)
industry
manufacturing
build
town
city
job
people
work
workforce

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

7
band
You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job working in the City Museum shop during the holidays. You decide to apply for the job. Write a letter to the director of the Museum. In your letter: •introduce yourself •explain what experience and special skills you have •explain why you are interested in the job
I hope this letter finds you well and in good health. I am writing this letter regarding the advertisement for the job working in the City Museum. My name is Sasha and I am a full-time student doing my undergrad at the University of Chicago. Another interesting point, I live ten minutes away from the museum.
7
band
The shortage of housing in big cities can cause severe consequences. Only government action can solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Undoubtedly, the shortage of housing in metropolitan areas is a major social issue and has a serious impact on their citizens. Some advocates mentioned that only the government can take the appropriate actions to resolve this vital problem. The regulator can formulate the long-term resolution of the housing problem and commercial companies or non-profit organizations can work with government bodies to manipulate the short-term rules to help those people suffering from a shortage of housing.
6
band
You work for an international company.You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job. Write a letter to your manager.In letter •describe the training course you want to do •explain what the company could do help you •say how the course will be useful for job
I am writing to apply for the manager in your international company.I hope you will look into this letter.
7.5
band
Some people think that success in life comes from hard work and determination, while others think that there are more important factors such as money and appearance. Dicuss both views and give your opinion.
In this ambitious world, money is trending. Indeed, more and more communities are evaluated based on their property. Some others believe that working hard will eventually make them successful while others , on the contrary, believe that it is all about being wealthy and having good looks. While both views are logical, this author argues that determination is the key to being more powerful. In this essay, the author will research both perspectives by giving clear examples.
6
band
These days many parents want their children to study a second language such as English. Do you think it is important for younger children to study a new language? Do you think schools should teach every student in primary school a second language?
In today's world, many parents believe it is important for their children to learn a second language, such as English. I agree that learning a new language at a young age has several benefits, both for the children and for society.

The bar chart shows the percentages of the Canadian workforce in five major industries in 1850 and 2020.

The shortage of housing in big cities can cause severe consequences. Only government action can solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that success in life comes from hard work and determination, while others think that there are more important factors such as money and appearance. Dicuss both views and give your opinion.

These days many parents want their children to study a second language such as English. Do you think it is important for younger children to study a new language? Do you think schools should teach every student in primary school a second language?