The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as prcentages of GDP for vaious European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The data show information about the amount of money spend in health as
proportion
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a proportion
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of GDP for different European
countries
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in 2002, 2007 and 2012.
Overall
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, Switzerland shows the highest proportions over the 10 years,
while
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Estonia remains the lowest
figure
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apply
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rate. Most of the
countries
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sustained
the
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apply
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almost
same
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the same
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percentage from 2002 to 2007, except France and
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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. Looking at the details, Switzerland has the highest percentage of 11% over the 10 years,
where as
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whereas
Estonia is keeping the lowest position of all years at 3%. The majority of
countries
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remained the same numbers in 2007 as in 2002, except France showed
slight
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a slight
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increase from 10% to 11%
and
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, and
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Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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showed
decline
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a decline
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from 10% to 9%. When Denmark, Lithuania, Norway, Poland and Slovenia showed about 1% increase in 2012,
while
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Luxembourg, Netherlands showed 1% of decrease
and
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, and
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France showed
nearly
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a nearly
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3% drop form 11% to 8%. The other
countries
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had the same percentages in 2012.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • health spending
  • share of GDP
  • the bar chart shows
  • compare
  • in 2002, 2007 and 2012
  • higher than
  • lower than
  • the highest figure
  • the lowest figure
  • went up
  • rose slightly
  • rose steadily
  • stayed the same
  • remained stable
  • a small increase
  • a clear rise
  • by contrast
  • while
  • whereas
  • overall
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