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The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart illustrates the rate of the total world
population
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 in 4
countries
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, which include India, China, the United States of America (
USA
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) and Japan, in the year 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050. All parameters are measured in percentage.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the different
countries
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 experienced significant changes in their total populations over these years, but the
USA
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 remained constant in the 2002 and 2050 estimated values. In the year 1950, China ranked highest among the 4
countries
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 with a
population
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 growth of 23%, which reduced to 20% in 2002.
However
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, India's share of the world
population
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 rose from 15% in 1950 to 17% in 2002.
On the other hand
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, the
USA
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, with a
population
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 of 7%, declined to 5% in 1950 and 2002, respectively.
Nonetheless
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, Japan, which is the least populated amongst the 4
countries
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populace
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population
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 of 4% in 1950, which was slightly reduced to 3% in 2002.
In addition
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, it is estimated that in 2050, the Indian
populace
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population
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 will experience an increase of 19%, ranking
them
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it
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 at the top
with
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, with
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 China's
population
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 significantly declining to 15%.
While
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USA
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the USA
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 maintains a constant
Japan
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, Japan
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 will drastically fall to 1% of
total
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the total
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population
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, countries, usa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bar chart
  • World population
  • Percentage
  • Projection
  • Demographics
  • Trend
  • Significant change
  • Ranking
  • Shifts
  • Decline
  • Growth
  • Comparative
  • Population distribution
  • Notable
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Population dynamics
  • Data interpretation
  • Summarize
  • Trends over time
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