The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage changes in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The diagram illustrates the proportion of export revenue in 2015 and 2016 and the comparison of the percentage changes in each category in 2016 and 2015.

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, petroleum products were significantly dominated by exports, even though textiles remained at the lowest rank but had the highest percentage change from 2016 to

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the

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year before.

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the detailed chart, both the figures for petroleum and engineered goods made up approximately 60

billion

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in 2015 and 2016, which is 3% and 8.5%

respectively

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, respectively

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, in

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value percentage changes from 2016 to 2015.

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the agricultural products in 2015 steadily made up roughly 30

billion

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in both years and slightly rose up at 0.81% in 2016. Textiles started at the bottom line, at 25

billion

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in 2015,

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it increased by 7

billion

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more.

from

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that, it had a significant upsurge in 2016, which is 15.24% compared to 2015.

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, luxury goods

such

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as gems and jewellery earned 43

billion

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in the first year, a year after decreasing 2

billion

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, which is 5.18% equivalent.

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The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage changes in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

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