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The chart below gives information about global population percentages and distribution of wealth by region. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

This
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 line chart depicts
informations
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 about the differences
of
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wealth
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 by regions in more than five
ountries
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countries
. It is clear from the graph
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 is a huge gape bitween the two types of
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populations.
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 what is
shown
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shown,
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 the global
wealth
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take
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takes
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 the highest percentages during
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 period , as we can see
Nourth
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North
 America in the first place with almost 35
%
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%,
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next
come
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comes
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 Europe with % , and
lastly
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 RichAsia Pacific with less than 25%.
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contrary
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 these three
are recored
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 a significant dip in the
population
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population,
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 the
peacentages
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percentages
 were under 16% of all of them.
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Moreover
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 we can talk about the other countries in
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general,
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 the populations had medium
avrages
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averages
,
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example,
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 China , Other Asia Pacific , India , and even Africa
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, with
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 no less than 10% and above 24%.
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addition
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addition,
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 they
are
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also
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 had lowest numbers in the Global
Wealth
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and
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, and
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 especially
India
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in India
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 and
Africa
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Africa,
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 there are nearly reach 3% only.
To sum up
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 , we could say that
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Latin America & Caribbean had close results in both population and global
wealth
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, with
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 4%-6%.

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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words wealth with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chart
  • global population
  • distribution of wealth
  • percentages
  • region
  • Asia
  • Africa
  • Europe
  • North America
  • South America
  • Oceania
  • disparity
  • account for
  • follow
  • despite
  • vary
  • demonstrate
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