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Band 2

The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The provided maps illustrate the different features that occurred in 1950, which
also
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remains
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remain
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 the same
till
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to
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this
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 day. A variety of changes
happened
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have happened
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 between 1950 and nowadays.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 there are a lot of areas where situated in places and have
been
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either been
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either
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apply
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moved
into
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to
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 different places or vanished.
For example
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,
In
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in
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 the past there was a huge place called
sheep
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Sheep
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, and have been replaced with many facilities.
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, the Barn had a massive movement. Observing the sites that changed at Beechwood Farm during 1950 and today, the trackers in the past were at the east
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, then
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then
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, it
got
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was
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 replaced by some holiday cottages.
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, today we added a road
instead
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 of
that
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the
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 track that was there.
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, that site on the north-south which is Sheep, it was replaced with solar panels, a camping field and a small parking
in
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on
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 two sides.
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, today the river remains still, so
does
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do
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 the Fruit trees, Soft fruits, and Vegetables.
However
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, the barn took a small place facing two roads in the south.

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Write a more clear overview. Say the main changes in one short part.
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Check facts very carefully. Some lines are not fully right or are hard to understand.
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Add more key changes from both maps, not only a few places.
coherence and cohesion
Use short and clear sentences. This will help your ideas sound more complete.
coherence and cohesion
Group ideas by area, for example east, west, north, and south.
coherence and cohesion
Use link words in a natural way, like overall, while, in contrast, and meanwhile.
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You gave an overview and said that many changes happened.
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You included some clear examples, like the sheep area, barn, and tracks.
coherence and cohesion
You used paragraphs to separate your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
You tried to compare past and present features.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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