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These days, more and more people are going to other countries for significant periods of time, either to find a job or to study. Do the advantages of living in a foreign country outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowdays
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Nowadays
, many
people
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 are migrating to different countries looking for new opportunities in their professional
life
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, to extend their studies or get a better job. For most of the
people
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 leave their home countries
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 a big challenge,
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that's
 why
people
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 need to compare both
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 advantages
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and
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 disadvantages to
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 the
desicion
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decision
.
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, the fact
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of leaving
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 your
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whole
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life
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 in your home
country
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, where
people
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 will
develope
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develop
 all the fields in their
lifes
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lives
, and
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deciding
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 to start from
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scratch
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 a huge change in
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everybody's
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 to another
country
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 to find a new job
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 or to study will open many new and better opportunities in
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life
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, because if you decide to go for it,
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it will
 be to get something better that you have in your current
life
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. Once you have moved to a new
country
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, it will be challenging, but
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also will
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it will also
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 bring new ways to carry out
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your
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.
People
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 who
moved
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move
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 will be able to open their minds to new cultures, new ways to make social
conexions
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connections
, and
also
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 will have new skills to resolve many problems that will come up in
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their
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 daily
and new
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routine.
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, nobody
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tells
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 that
move
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moving
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 to a strange
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 will be easy,
people
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 need to find everything by
themselfs
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themselves
 at least at the
begining
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beginning
 of the new
experiencie, most of the
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experience. Most people when they
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people
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 when arrive
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in a
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new
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 do not have any family or friends who
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are
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 able to help
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then
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them
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 or guide thougth their new
lifes
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lives
. If the person is
traveling
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travelling
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 by themself, the lonlyness it will be hard, they will need to find out most of the things making mistakes and
learning
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learn
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 from
there
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them
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.
However
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, in my opinion,
made
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making
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 the decision to move to a different
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 to study or get a new job
,
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apply
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represent
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represents
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 a huge change in
the
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apply
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people
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's
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life
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lives
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,
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 I can say
that
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is
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it is
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 one of the most
valuables
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valuable
 experiences that a person can live. You will be living something that you have never
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thought of living
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, but it will open many opportunities in the future
that
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, so that
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 everything that you will live in the way will
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make
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 sense once you
achive
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achieve
 your biggest
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 goals.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural exposure
  • Diversity
  • Personal growth
  • Language skills
  • Career opportunities
  • Networking
  • Professional connections
  • Enhanced education
  • Learning
  • Language barrier
  • Communication difficulties
  • Homesickness
  • Isolation
  • Cultural differences
  • Adaptation challenges
  • Financial constraints
  • Cost of living
  • Legal complexities
  • Administrative complexities
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