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The pictures show the layout of a cinema in 1980 and the same cinema now.

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The maps show the layout of a
cinema
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 in 1980 and at the present day.
Overall
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, the
cinema
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 changed significantly between 1980 and the present day. In 1980, the
cinema
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 had a car park located
right
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 behind it. Next to the entrance, on the
right
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, there
were
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 a ticket office and a beverage stand. On the
right
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 was the first
cinema
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 screen,
while
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 the toilets were opposite it. Near that was the second
cinema
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 screen.
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, the
cinema
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 has now removed the car park and expanded its
overall
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 area. At the entrance, on the left are the ticket office and a DVD shop,
while
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 on the
right
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 are a relaxation room and a refreshment stand. The number of
cinema
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 screens has increased to five. Opposite the entrance are two screening rooms, with the toilets located between them. In the far corner, there are three remaining screening rooms.

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task response
For task response, add a little more detail about where the new rooms are. This will make your report more full and clear.
task response
For task response, compare old and new parts more directly, not only list them. This helps show change in a stronger way.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, use a few more link words like 'while', 'whereas', and 'in contrast' to connect ideas more smoothly.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, group the present layout in a clearer order, for example from the entrance to the back. This makes it easier to follow.
task response
For task response, you gave a clear overview of the main change, and this is very important.
task response
For task response, you mentioned key parts like the car park, ticket office, toilets, and screen rooms.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, your essay has a clear start, overview, and detail paragraphs.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, most ideas are easy to follow and the order is mostly logical.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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