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Band 3.5

You recently stayed at a hotel, but you were not satisfied with your experience. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter: Explain when and why you stayed at the hotel Describe the problems you experienced Suggest what the hotel should do to improve

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Dear Madam/
sir
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Sir
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i
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I
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 am writing to express my concerns about the cleaning
rooms
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of the rooms
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. I experienced a situation
the
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apply
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last
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 week (11
april
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April
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 - 14
april
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April
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) when my family checked the room
was
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, which was
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 really dirty
and
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, and
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 it was smelling bad
aswell, it
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as well. It
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 was the first experience like that in your hotel.
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although i
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Although I
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 was
initialy
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initially
 excited to
visited
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visit
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 a
4 stars
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4-star
 hotel,
i
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I
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 was quite
dissapointed
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disappointed
 with the cleaning inside the rooms.
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as
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As
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 a result, my family felt sad with that experience.
i
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I
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 believe
this
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situatuioon
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situation
 could be improved by checking rooms
befre
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before
 the costumers arrived it.
it
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 would be
benefecial
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beneficial
 for you costumer service.
thanks
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Thank
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 you for your attention to
this
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 matter.
i llok
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I look
 forward to your
responce
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response
.
kind
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 regards, Juan Miranda

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task response
Say more about why you stayed at the hotel.
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Add one or two clear problems with simple detail.
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Your fix idea is good, but add one more way the hotel can improve.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear paragraph order: why you stayed, problems, then what the hotel should do.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like and, but, so, because.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main idea in each paragraph.
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You answered all parts of the task.
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Your tone is polite and right for a letter to a manager.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has an opening and a closing.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are easy to follow most of the time.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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