The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in total energy supply in 4 countries from 1997 to 2010.

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The graph
emerges
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shows
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the extent of renewable energy sources in
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overall
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the overall
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suppliment
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supply
of four different
coutries
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countries
between 1997
from
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and
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2010.
Overall
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, from the given
data
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data,
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it is referred that
Iceland
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shows
highest
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the highest
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trend
while
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Sweden and Australia stands illustrates plummet point. In 1997,
Australie
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Australia
and Sweden shows very low extent by standing
in
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at
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10 percentage
whereas
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Iceland
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and Turkey reveals highest by reaching
at
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apply
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50 and 40
proportion
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per cent
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of energy supply.
when
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it comes to
in
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apply
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the year
of
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apply
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2000, Australia and Sweden
shows
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show
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some decrease
by
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,
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standing
in a
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at
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5 percentage
as well as
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Turkey and
Iceland
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indicates
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indicate
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some improvements
by
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,
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reaching 60 and 50
extent
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per cent
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of that trend.
Moreover
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, in 2010,
Iceland
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standed the peak of that graph by
staying in
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accounting for
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70
percentage
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per cent
of that commodity's supply
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whereas
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, whereas
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Turkey demonstrates a little transformation in its own improvement.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, whereas".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words iceland with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stands" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • renewable energy
  • total energy supply
  • percentage
  • overall
  • changed
  • increases
  • decreases
  • fluctuating
  • trend
  • highest
  • lowest
  • significant
  • commitment
  • sustainability
  • environmental protection
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