The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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illustrates the total
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of minutes (in
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) of telephone calls in the UK. The
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increased sharply during the seven years
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however
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the number of local
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didn't change. Mobiles and national and international
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in 1995 at 1 and 38
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respectively. They both increased sharply,
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in 2002 they were
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45 and 60
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respectively. The local
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in 1995 at 72 and went up slowly
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however
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, after 1999 dicrease gradually and in 2002 was as it started at 72
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words billions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • telecommunications
  • landline
  • mobile phones
  • local calls
  • national and international calls
  • billion
  • minutes
  • growth
  • decrease
  • trend
  • fluctuate
  • overtake
  • peak
  • plummet
  • steady
  • significant
  • minor
  • chart
  • period
  • comparison
  • category
  • data
  • illustrate
  • reveal
  • indicate
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