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The two bar charts below show the proportion of 14 to 16 - year old students studying a foreign language in an English spoken country and the top 3 foreign languages.

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two-bar
 chart compares the proportion of 14 to 16 - years old students studying foreign
languages
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 in an
English spoken
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English-speaking
 country in 1981 and 2007, and illustrates the top three
languages
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 during these years.
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, the bar chart showing the proportion of students studying another
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 clearly indicates that girls were consistently more likely than boys to study a second
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 in both years. Meanwhile, French had the highest percentage among the
languages
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 selected by learners. The second
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 that increased in prominence over the period was Spanish.
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 with, in 1984, around 50% of girls studied a foreign
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 the figure for boys was significantly lower at approximately 30%. In terms of specific
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, French was by far the most popular choice, accounting for roughly 50% of students. Simultaneously , German represented about 20%,
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 Spanish was the least commonly studied, at only around 5%.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • foreign language
  • bilingualism
  • cultural exchange
  • trends
  • globalization
  • motivation
  • curriculum
  • educational implications
  • cognitive development
  • historical ties
  • economic partnerships
  • cultural exposure
  • media
  • digital communication
  • xenophobia
  • international understanding
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