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With the rise of the gig economy, more people are working as freelancers rather than permanent employees. Do you think the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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Because of the
flourish
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flourishing
 of
gig
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the gig
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 economy, the
incresaing
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increasing
 presence of
people
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 working freely
which
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, which
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surpass
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surpasses
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 permanent
employees
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employees,
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 has become a noticeable phenomenon.
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job
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stucture
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structure
 in society brings several advantages, it
also
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posese
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poses
 challenges. From my perspective, the benefits outweigh the drawbacks.
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, the gig economy can help each person to find their own strengths. A freelancer can choose a
job
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whatever
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that
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 they are interested in based on their own habits and what they
are
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apply
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excel at, which will spark
people
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’s enterprise
on
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 things they focus
.
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on.
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This
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 will make their lives more meaningful. In
comparsion
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comparison
, most of the
permenant
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permanent
 workers do the
identikit
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identical
 things every day. In that way, they will
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 their
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enthusiasm
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 towards their jobs
which
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, which
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 may get them into
secdonary
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secondary
 lifestyles without any ambitions.
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, plenty of entrepreneurs were
freelancers
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 beforehand
,
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.
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 I think the reason for
them to be
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their
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 success is that they found their own areas that they were really good at and carried
all
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them
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 out doing that.
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,
freelancers
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 are more flexible than
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permanent
 workers. For
people
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 like influencers,
writers
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writers,
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 singers and so on, their workplaces and working times are not limited, so they can arrange their own agendas based on their own
willings
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wills
, there are no
restricts
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restrictions
 to them, so they can do things in a very realxing which could result in better quality works that are more appealing to the public.
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, writers can find
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inspiration
 by going to different places all over the world, they wouldn’t feel stressed
so
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, so
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 they can write many brilliant books.
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, some risks that
this
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 is facing cannot be ignored.
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permenant
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permanent
 works are rigid, most of them are connected with walfare system
which
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, which
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 means they will have
very
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a very
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 stable income even until they retire from works, that said, if
a
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apply
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freelancers
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 get stuck or they experience failure, their financial conditions are not stable. Despite these drawbacks, governments can invest an amount of money to help these
freelancers
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 who get stuck
,
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;
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this
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 method can significantly increase the
job
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 security of these
people
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. In conclusion,
although
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 the rise of
gig
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the gig
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 economy provides flexibility and passion for
people
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, the financial uncertainty and
job
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inseucrity
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insecurity
 cannot be ignored.
Therefor
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Therefore
, I believe that these drawbacks can be solved effectively.

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task response
Answer the question more directly in each body part. Keep showing why the good points are stronger than the bad points.
task response
Make your main ideas clearer. Some parts are hard to follow because the meaning is not clear.
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Use examples that are more real and clear. Explain them in a simple way.
coherence and cohesion
Put one main idea in each paragraph and link it clearly to the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Use short and clear link words like first, also, however, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence order. Some sentences are too long and this makes your point hard to understand.
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You answer both sides and give your opinion clearly.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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You use examples to support your ideas.
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