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Band 3.5

The graph below shows the consumption of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007.

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The chart
demostrates
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demonstrates
 the number of
consunptions
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consumptions
 of three diverse
kind
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 of spread
such
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 as margarine,butter and low fat&reduace spread during 26 years.
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Overall
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Overall,
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 it is obvious that
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apply
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 Margarine and butter experiencend are increas, apart from low fat&reduace.In inicial period Butter was the most preferred
while
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 margarine was the least.
in
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 the ultimate
period
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period,
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 low &reduace was the highest.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • spreads
  • increased
  • decreased
  • stable
  • significantly
  • approximately
  • per capita
  • remarkable
  • peaked
  • experienced
  • started
  • remained
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