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The graph below shows the consumption of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007.

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Overall
Linking Words
, it is
clean
Correct word choice
clear
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 that
,
Punctuation problem
apply
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 the quantity of margarine and butter decreased over the year, except
the
Correct word choice
that the
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 Low fat & reduced spreads were increased. The highest point of
comsumprion
Correct your spelling
consumption
 of spreads was in Butter
and
Punctuation problem
, and
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would
Correct pronoun usage
it would
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 be said the lowest point in
Margine
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Margarine
.

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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • spreads
  • increased
  • decreased
  • stable
  • significantly
  • approximately
  • per capita
  • remarkable
  • peaked
  • experienced
  • started
  • remained
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