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The plane plans fellow shows the site of an airport now and how it will look after her next year map

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This
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illustrate
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illustrates
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 key information about the transportation of an Airport now and after development through out a year.
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, it is clear from the graph that
area
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the area
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 underwent
significant
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a significant
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 transformation,
A
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apply
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new tourist facilities
added
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were added
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,
mean
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meanwhile
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 some
exsiting feauther
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existing features
 were removed or replaced.
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 what is shown, before changes,
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the
 area mainly consisted
by
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 two doors, one of them for Arrivals, and the other for departures that located in the
south west
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southwest
 of the map
,
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. Furthermore
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furthermore
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, it
contain
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contains
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 a
chick
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check
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 point, and
cafe
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a cafe
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 next to it,
besides
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,
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apply
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 an elevator that
contain
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 three floors. in terms of the transformation, the places of the checpoint and cafe changed,
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 some Bag drop and shops added, following the changes, the door has extanded, New parking built in the south east of the map, New Atm and cofe opend beyond the parking, there is a sharp rise on the floor, that became 18 floors, the elevator demolished, but new train became insted of it.

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Write a clearer first sentence. Say what the map shows now and in the future.
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Add more key details from both maps. Show the main new parts and the parts that changed place.
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Use simple and exact words for places, for example gate, shop, cafe, train, and car park.
coherence and cohesion
Group ideas by area or by time. This will make the essay easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Use full stops more well. Some sentences are too long and hard to read.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words in a simple way, such as first, next, also, and finally.
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You gave an overview and said that the airport will change a lot.
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You mentioned a number of important changes, like shops, bag drop, car park, ATM, and train.
coherence and cohesion
You tried to compare the airport now and after the plan.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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