The diagrams gives information about changes in a student accomodation, Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant

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The diagrams
gives
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information about changes in a
student
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accomodation
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accommodation
.
Oversll
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Overall
,
it is clear that
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the
student
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residential area underwent significant transformations, becoming a more developed and
modernized
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area by the end of the period. In 2010,
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student
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the student
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living space. There was a
student
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bedroom
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, near which was a
student
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bedroom
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2.
Student
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bedroom
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3 is located in the
center
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near
which
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apply
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bedroom
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4
and
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apply
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bedroom
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. Shared kitchen and lounge located in
east
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the east
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.
While
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carridor
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is situated in the
center
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. Today,
this
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accomodation
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accommodation
has significant transformations. The
bedroom
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1 in
west
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the west
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, which was previously occupied by
bedroom
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A. Where the temporary
bedroom
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4 and
bedroom
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3
, there
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were, there
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were now
study
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a study
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and loundry room.
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kitchen
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the kitchen
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room
removed
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was removed
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, and
this
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replace bed, desk,
bathroom
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and bathroom
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was built.
While
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corridor
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the corridor
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is changed communal area.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words student, bedroom with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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