The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (20 mins.)

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The graph
describs
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describes
the
deffirance
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difference
between 2005 and 2010, in
online
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the online
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shoping
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shopping
market profit in Canada.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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most of
categories
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the categories
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are
same
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the same
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in order
spictialy
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specifically the
first two.
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,
least
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two
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changed as the costumer changs ther mind.
Electornics
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Electronics
and
appliance
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appliances
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are holding
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the number
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1
sales
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in
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overall the
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the overall
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period. To be more
spesific
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specific
, people are driven more
toword
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towards
food and online orders to jump the
sales
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from 22% to be 32% in 2010.
whereas
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furnishing
sales
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drop approximatly 10% to end up 15% as a prove custemse need to feel and check
every thing
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everything
in person rather than online
pecture
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purchase
. Electronic categorty remain highest and
despit
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despite
the decline of 5% in 2010 to secure one
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third
of
silling
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selling
items. Meanwhile, the growth
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of video games to be more publice has it is own trend to increas the
sales
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of it to be 32% ,higher by %10 from 2005.

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