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Access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge.

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Access to clean
water
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 is widely
recognized
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 as a fundamental human right.
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 some argue that governments should provide
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 free of charge to all households, I believe that maintaining utility fees is more appropriate, with targeted support for those in need. On the one hand, governments have a responsibility to ensure that no citizen is deprived of clean
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. In cases where low-income families struggle to afford it, subsidies or exemptions can be justified as part of universal welfare. Guaranteeing access to safe
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 is essential for public health and reflects the government’s duty to protect its people.
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, making
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 completely free for everyone would place a heavy financial burden on taxpayers. It could
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 encourage wasteful consumption, as people may not feel the need to conserve
water
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. Since the majority of households can afford their bills, exempting all citizens would be inefficient and environmentally unsustainable. A more balanced approach is to charge for
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 offering selective assistance to vulnerable groups. In conclusion,
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water
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 is a basic human right, providing it free of charge to all households is impractical. Governments should retain utility fees but ensure that disadvantaged families receive adequate support.

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For task response, explain a bit more why free water can hurt the public budget and the environment.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • basic
  • human
  • right
  • water
  • supply
  • provided
  • free
  • charge
  • agree
  • disagree
  • health
  • essential
  • sick
  • diseases
  • supports
  • education
  • children
  • focus
  • learning
  • searching
  • better
  • futures
  • reduce
  • poverty
  • families
  • save
  • money
  • spend
  • important
  • needs
  • promote
  • equality
  • chance
  • access
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