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The tables below give information about the sales of cocoa beans and coffee in five European countries in 2000 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The two tables show the
sales
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 of coffee and cocoa beans in the United
Kingdom
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, Germany, France,
Netherlands
Correct article usage
the Netherlands
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,
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Switzerland
Correct word choice
and Switzerland
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 in 2000 and 2005.
Overall
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, both cocoa beans and coffee increased in 2000 and
2005
Punctuation problem
2005,
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 respectively. It can be seen that
,
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apply
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 the United
kingdom
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 the only country with the highest amount of
sales
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 among the others Countries for the two products
,
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;
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however
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,
the
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apply
show examples
Switzerland
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 was the lowest. In detail, for cocoa
beans
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bean
show examples
sales
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,
In
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in
show examples
 2000 the United
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kingdom
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Kingdom
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 was 13.6
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millions
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million
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 and
then
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, after 5
years
Punctuation problem
years,
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 went up to 27.3
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millions
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million
show examples
. On one hand,
the
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apply
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Germany, France,
Netherland
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the Netherlands
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,
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Switzerland
Correct word choice
and Switzerland
show examples
are
Verb problem
apply
show examples
show a
little raised
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slight rise
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 from 2000
until
Change preposition
to
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 2005.
On the other hand
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, coffee
sales
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 in the United
kingdom
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 the
sales
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 jumbed nearly a half by 2000 was 68.3
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millions
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million
show examples
, but in 2005 was 137
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millions
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million
show examples
. The second highest was Germany in 2000
was
Correct pronoun usage
, which was
show examples
 24.5
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millions
Fix the agreement mistake
million
show examples
, after that
in
Punctuation problem
, in
show examples
 2005
was
Correct pronoun usage
, it was
show examples
 49.1
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millions
Fix the agreement mistake
million
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, which was
significant
Correct article usage
a significant
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increased
Replace the word
increase
 in
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
sales
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.
In addition
Linking Words
, there was a considerable jumb all these countries
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Switzerland
Punctuation problem
: Switzerland
show examples
,
French
Replace the word
France
, Netherlands.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, kingdom, switzerland, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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