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The table and charts below give information about the police budget in a region of the UK for 2015 and 2016. The table shows the sources of the money and the charts show how it was spent. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Given are the table and pie charts illustrating information about the
budget
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 of the police in a certain region of the UK for two years (2015, 2016), with the former showing sources of income and the latter demonstrating the distribution of
this
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 money.
Overall
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, the total income of the police had admittedly risen from 285.4
million
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pounds
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 to almost 300
million
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pounds
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 in a year. The greatest proportion of the
budget
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 came from the Central Government, with 164
million
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pounds
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 in 2015 and 166
million
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pounds
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 in 2016,
while
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 the second largest source was from the local taxes, that's contribution inclined to 10
million
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pounds
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 throughout the year.
In addition
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, income from other sources stayed almost the same, with a difference of 0.5
million
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pounds
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. Moving to the expenditure of the police
budget
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, there were no considerable changes.
Although
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 there was a decline of 6%,
organisation
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the organisation
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 spent
three fourth
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three-fourths
 of its
budget
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 for buildings and transportation in both years.
Lastly
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, spendings for technologies
inclined
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increased
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 from 9% to 15%,
while
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budget
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the budget
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 for
salaries
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the salaries
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 of the staff stayed unchanged (18%).

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, million, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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