You have recently moved to a different house. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter • explain why you have moved • describe the new house • invite your friend to come and visit

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Dear Pooja, I am writing
this
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to inform you that I moved to a new york
due to
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my work. I want to describe the place
that
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where
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,
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apply
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I am staying
is
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, which is
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so beautiful
as
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that
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you could not imagine, it seems like
this
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is my world
which
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, which
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I used to describe to you. The house is 1BHK, on the
entrance
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entrance,
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there is
so
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an
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amazing picture of horses which
make
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makes
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me feel always running without being tired.
Also
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, beside the entrance when
walk
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walking
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down
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a little
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little
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little,
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there is a small kitchen which seems tiny and cute
withpink
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with pink
in
color
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colour
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.
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, there is a hall in front of the kitchen which has a two-seater sofa and
a
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an
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eye-catching chandelier in the hall.
Moreover
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, the bedroom is the best place which I am so excited to describe as I decorated
Like
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like
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a princess staying in a castle with white and little yellow
color
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colour
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, and the view from my bedroom is quite
fanstatic
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fantastic
as you
could
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can
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see the wavy beach.
This
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house is so pretty
and
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, and
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it feels calm and friendly to me. I would be grateful if you could visit and
hangout
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hang out
with me. I am looking forward
for you
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to your
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response. Thank you for your time and consideration. Best Regards, Palak.

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task response
Say why you moved in a more clear way. For example: I moved to New York because I got a new job there.
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Invite your friend with more detail, like when to come or what you can do together.
coherence and cohesion
Put each main idea in its own part: why you moved, what the house is like, and the visit.
coherence and cohesion
Use short linking words like and, also, but, so to make ideas easy to follow.
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You answered all parts of the task: reason, house, and visit.
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Your tone is warm and friendly for a letter to a friend.
coherence and cohesion
You used greeting and closing well.
coherence and cohesion
The house description has many clear details.
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