Some people believe that it is good for students to have the same teacher for several years. Others think students benefit more from having new teachers each year. Which do you think is better? Give specific reasons to support your opinion.

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thing, if only one teacher teaches them during their learning age.
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I will discuss both points before presenting my own view.

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Answer the question more fully. Now you only give the introduction, so your view is not clear yet.
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Add clear main ideas in body parts. Each body part should have one strong point and a short example.
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Give your own opinion in a direct way. Say which side is better and why.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words to guide the reader, like first, also, however, and in conclusion.
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Be careful with sentence breaks. Some parts are joined in a weak way, for example after while.
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Make each sentence connect to the next one with one clear topic.
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You clearly introduce both sides of the topic.
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Your opening sentence shows the topic is about teachers and children.
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There is a basic essay plan with an introduction and a promise to discuss both views.
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The ideas are easy to follow at the start.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • benefit
  • persistent relationship
  • academic performance
  • support
  • guidance
  • familiarity
  • strengths and weaknesses
  • personalized feedback
  • expose
  • diverse
  • perspective
  • subject matter expertise
  • enriching
  • resourcefulness
  • innovative practices
  • curriculum
  • monotony
  • stagnation
  • mitigate
  • favoritism
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