Write a letter to a hotel manager about booking a private room for family party. Explaining What kind of party is it? What do you need in the room? And ask for food and prices?

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
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letter with the intent of booking a private room at your hotel as I am planning to organise a surprise party on my sister's birthday. She is turning ten
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year, so I would like to make it memorable for her. I am wondering if
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would be able to reserve a room for
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a family
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gathering. I would really apprieciate if I
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get a room equipped with
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chairs and tables. As I have already decided
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particular theme for the decoration
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I will discuss with you later.
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, my sister has a keen interest in soft music
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I would request you if you could arrange it .
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,
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you please provide me a list of food which you will provide us if I
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include the catering
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the price of each and every item. I look forward to
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a response from you. Yours sincerely, Rajdeep Kaur

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Task response: You answer all parts, but ask more clearly for the room size, date, and time.
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Task response: Keep the tone polite and formal. Do not use too many long lines with 'I would'.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end, which is good.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Link ideas with simple words like 'also', 'because', and 'so'.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Check small word errors, because they can make the message less clear.
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Task response: You explain the party well and say why it is special.
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Task response: You ask for food and price, so the purpose is clear.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Each paragraph has one main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The greeting and closing fit a formal letter.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • milestone birthday
  • celebration
  • seating arrangements
  • audio-visual equipment
  • customizable food and beverage packages
  • dietary restrictions
  • price list
  • budgeting
  • decorations
  • guests
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