IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4.5

The diagram below shows the life cycle of a flower and the various stages it goes through. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

✍️ Want to check your own essay?Try for free →
Looking from an
overall
Linking Words
 perspective, the diagram illustrates how to thrive the flower and
various
Correct article usage
the various
show examples
 steps.
Overall
Linking Words
, growing completely
includes
Verb problem
takes
show examples
 10 days.
Linking Words
Firstly
Punctuation problem
Firstly,
show examples
 bring some seeds to plant
Punctuation problem
. Last
show examples
last
Linking Words
 but not least untill seedling consists of 1 week. Flowers are grown with buds in 3 days. Morover in the
last
Linking Words
step
Use synonyms
, they are grown with fruits. In the first
step
Use synonyms
, we bring seeds to plant in the soil and water some.
In
Linking Words
addition
Add a comma
addition,
show examples
 flowers
are
Verb problem
apply
show examples
sprout before germination in
on e
Correct your spelling
one
 week
and
Punctuation problem
, and
show examples
next
Correct article usage
the next
show examples
step
Use synonyms
 floweres leaves happens seedling.
aFter
Fix capitalization
After
show examples
 that stage
leaves
Punctuation problem
, leaves
show examples
 are planted with buds. In
this
Linking Words
 paragraph
after
Punctuation problem
, after
show examples
plantation
Replace the word
planting
 with buds,
plants
Correct article usage
the plants
show examples
are blossomed
Wrong verb form
bloom
show examples
 with flowers
approximately in
Correct word order
in approximately
show examples
 three days.
After
Linking Words
this
Linking Words
Use synonyms
step
Add a comma
step,
show examples
 plants
encounter
Verb problem
begin
show examples
 to
appear
Verb problem
produce
show examples
 some fruits
in
Change preposition
on
show examples
 one plant.
Untill
Correct your spelling
Until
this
Linking Words
step
Use synonyms
these
Punctuation problem
, these
show examples
 flower plants
are thrived
Wrong verb form
thrive
show examples
 with wateration
germination
Punctuation problem
, germination
show examples
, sprouting,
seedling
Correct word choice
and seedling
show examples

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, overall".
▼
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words step with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: