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Band 4.5

You are a student at an English language school in Brighton and are living in private accommodation with other flat mates. You have not had hot water or heating for some time. The landlord’s workmen have tried to fix the problem but without success. Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter: • state your reason for writing • describe the problems • propose a solution

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Dear
Mr.
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Mr
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 Nicko, I hope you are doing well. I am writing to inform you
that
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that,
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 unfortunately, the apartment does not have
proper
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a proper
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 heating system. For the past three weeks,
me and my flatmates
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my flatmates and I
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 have experienced low temperature during nights, which caused
incovenience
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inconvenience
 for us.
Moreover
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,
The
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 water temperature was
not either
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neither
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 suitable
to take
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for taking
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 a shower
or
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nor for
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 washing the dishes.
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 some workmen came and
have
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apply
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tried to fix the problem, they were not able to find a solution for that. I really appreciate
if
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it if
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 you
follow-up
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follow up
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Also
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 I would like to ask you to provide us
a
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heater and a water boiler under these circumstances. If you require any
further
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 information regarding the situation or more details about it, you can contact me via
this
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 email address. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Perry Dia

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task response
For task response: say the main problem in a more clear way at the start. You can say there is no hot water and no heating in the flat.
task response
For task response: your solution is good, but add one direct request for a full repair soon.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: your ideas are in a clear order: reason, problems, solution. This is good.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: use linking words in a more natural way, for example: Also, As a result, Therefore.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: keep each sentence simple and clear. This will make the letter easier to follow.
task response
You answered all parts of the task.
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Your tone is polite and right for a letter to a landlord.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Each paragraph has one main idea.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodation
  • tenant
  • landlord
  • maintenance
  • heating system
  • certified heating engineer
  • temporary arrangement
  • compensation
  • inconvenience
  • discomfort
  • urgency
  • prompt response
  • professional assessment
  • cooperate
  • resolve
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