The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.

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The bar chart displays the total
minutes
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of phone calls in the UK, across three categories, between 1995
to
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and
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2002.
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,
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majority of the call
minutes
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are by the local fixed
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, as it remained on top throughout the entirety of the given period.
the
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national and international fixed
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has been steadily rising and
becoming
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is becoming
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closer to
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the local fixed
line
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additionally
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, mobile phones have been increasing as well
yet
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remain a strong third on the chart. From 1995 to 1999, the total
minutes
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of the local fixed
line
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maintained a steady rise and peaked at 90
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in the final year. For the remaining
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it declined to reach a total of roughly 70
billions
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in 2002. The national and international fixed
line
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has been increasing gradually, and peaked in the
last
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year at approximately 60 billion total
minutes
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, which placed it as a close second to the local fixed
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. As for Moblies, they have
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kept a steady increase that took off in 2000 and peaked
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2002 with a total of approximately 45 billion
minutes
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, line with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number
  • minutes
  • telephone calls
  • UK
  • divided into
  • categories
  • from
  • to
  • overall
  • increased significantly
  • local fixed-line calls
  • accounted for
  • largest proportion
  • throughout
  • period
  • international calls
  • highest rate of growth
  • experiencing
  • sharp increase
  • national long-distance calls
  • remained relatively stable
  • slight decline
  • towards
  • end
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