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The line graph compares the number of goods transported to the UK by four various modes of transportation in the years 1974 to 2002. Data are expressed in million of tonnes.

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The depicted line bar
graph
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 delineates the information about
number
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the number
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 of goods which are transported from
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year
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apply
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1974 to 2002 in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom by various
different
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transportation
modules
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modes
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. The
overall
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 summary of the given
graph
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 quite
vivdly
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vividly
 illustrates that
road
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the road
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 transportation model has been used more significantly than the
others
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other
 modules from
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year
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1974 to 2002. In
deatil
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detail
, as we examine the given
graph
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, it demonstrates that
,
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 rails from
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year
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1974
is considerably dropped till
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to
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year
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 1986
and
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, and
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 for a brief
moment
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moment,
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 it
stablize
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stabilises
 in
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year
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1990
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1990,
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 after
once again it is dropped
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which it drops again
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 and
stabalized
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stabilises
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 from
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year
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1994 to 2002.
Rails
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The Rails
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 transport module has shown worse development in the
graph
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 than other modules
,
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. The
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 Pipeline module showed some growth in
intial
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initial
 years
after
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, after
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 that it remained
in
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neutral
neither
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, neither
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 decreasing nor spiking
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whereas
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,
water
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whereas water
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 and roads had shown significant high values in
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graph
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the graph
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 compared to rails and pipelines. Transportations by roads
exceeds
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exceeded
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 eighty million from the start to reaching almost one hundred million in 2002
leaving
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, leaving
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 even water transportation behind.

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