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You should spend about 2 0 minutes on this task. The graph shows the percentage of UK adolescents following a vegetarian diet. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

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The Graph shows the
amount
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number
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 of vegetarians among
adult people
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adults
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 in
UK
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the UK
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 from 1960-2020.
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Overall
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Overall,
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 the
popularity
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 of special diet rises sharply from its lowest and reached its peak
popularity
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 in 1980,
then
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 dropped and remained mostly stable after graduate increase.
Graph
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The graph
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 shows a rising
popularity
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 of
vegetarian
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the vegetarian
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 diet from 1960 to
1980
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1980,
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 where it was on the top throughout
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the
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last
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 decades.
After
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this
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, it
plummet
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plummeted
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,
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 and fluctuated from 1990 to 2000.
Then
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 it faced a graduate increace and remained stable since 2010. In conclusion,
line
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the line
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 shows
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popularity
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the popularity
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 of
vegetarian
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the vegetarian
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 diet earlier and its rising
popularity
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 in recent years.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words popularity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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