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The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two maps illustrate Beechwood
Farm
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 in 1950 and nowadays, showing how the
farm
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 has developed over time.
Overall
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, Beechwood
Farm
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 mainly consisted of agricultural areas in 1950;
however
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, over the years, several new features related to tourism have been added,
such
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 as holiday cottages and a camping area.
According to
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 the maps, a new
farm
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 shop has been built in the area where fruit trees were previously located on the south-western side.
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, there have been no significant changes to the soft fruit and vegetable areas over the period. In the centre of the
farm
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, new camping huts have been constructed near the parking area,
whereas
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 there were no trees in
this
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 part of the land in 1950.
In addition
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, the old barn has been converted into holiday cottages,
while
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 a new barn has been built between the two roads. Meanwhile, new parking spaces can now be seen near the solar panels.

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task response
Add more key changes from the maps. This will make your answer more full.
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Make the overview a bit clearer. Say the biggest changes in one short part.
coherence and cohesion
Use more direct compare words like 'while', 'but', and 'in contrast'.
coherence and cohesion
Group ideas by area or by change type. This will make the flow stronger.
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Check one sentence: 'whereas there were no trees in this part of the land in 1950' seems unclear and may not match the map well.
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You gave a clear overview of the farm changing from farming use to tourism use.
coherence and cohesion
Your answer has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
You used some good linking words like 'however', 'in addition', and 'meanwhile'.
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