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The four charts illustrate the purposes of travel to the UK via different airports in 2016.

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The four pie charts compare the purpose of
travel
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 to the UK through
Gatwick
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,
Heathrow
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,
Luton
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 and Stansted
airports
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 in 2016.
Overall
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, holiday
travel
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 accounted for the largest proportion of passengers at
Gatwick
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 and
Heathrow
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airports
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,
while
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 visiting friends was the most common purpose at
Luton
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 and Stansted.
By contrast
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,
traveling
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travelling
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 for
another
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other
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 reasons represented the smallest percentage at all four
airports
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. Regarding holiday
travel
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,
Gatwick
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 Airport recorded the highest figure, with 54% of passengers
traveling
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travelling
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 for
this
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 purpose. The proportion at
Heathrow
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 was considerably lower, at 37%,
while
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 both
Luton
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 and Stansted showed the same share of 36%.
In contrast
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, visiting friends was most common at
Luton
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 and Stansted, accounting for 50% and 49% respectively, compared with 33% at
Heathrow
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 and only 30% at
Gatwick
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. As for business
travel
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,
Heathrow
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 had the highest proportion at 26%, which was almost double the figures for
Gatwick
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 and Stansted, both at 14%.
Luton
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 recorded the lowest percentage in
this
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 category, at 13%. Meanwhile,
travel
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 for other purposes remained minimal across all four
airports
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, accounting for only 2% at
Gatwick
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 and Stansted, and 4% at
Heathrow
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words travel, gatwick, heathrow, luton, airports with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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