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The graph below shows the regional household recycling rates in the UK, France and Germany from the years 2005-2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph compares the regional household recycling rates in the
UK
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 ,
France
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 and Germany between 2005 and 2015, with units measured in percentage .From an
overall
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perspectivel
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perspective
,the
UK
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 and Germany experienced an upward trend ,
while
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France
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 declined ,albeit at varying levels .Notably , the
UK
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 surpassed
France
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thereby emerging as the dominant figure by the end of the
period
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 . In 2005,
France
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 recorded approximately 50% for regional household recycling ,making
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highest
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the highest
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 figure on the chart
,
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however
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,
this
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 figure experienced a dramatic decrease
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to 30% , and rose to 40%
at the end
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 of the
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Meanewhile
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Meanwhile
, the
UK
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 started around 35% in 2005 , rose gradually to 40% in 2009 before increasing
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 to 60% in 2015.
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 ,Germany began around 20% in 2005 and experienced adramtic rose by the end of the
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 and finished the
period
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 with 57% .

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, france, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • regional household recycling rates
  • overall trend
  • significant increase
  • steady rise
  • fluctuations
  • marginal decline
  • notable drop
  • peak
  • trough
  • comparative analysis
  • year-on-year growth
  • data patterns
  • rate of change
  • noteworthy milestones
  • disparities
  • environmental policies
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