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Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The map delineates the development of
the
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Chorleywood
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 a village
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 in close proximity to London
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which
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whose
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 population
was
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 increased gradually since the 19th century.
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, noticeable developments,
such
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 as the Railway and the
motorway
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motorway,
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 were
buit
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built
 during the
period
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 of 20th century.
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, the population of the specified area was significantly lower and resided on the westward side of the Chorleywood park and golf course,
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between 1868 and 1883. During
this
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period
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period,
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 no
such
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 development can be observed except the Main Road.
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, over the
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 of 1922-1970,
significant
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 number of inhabitants resided in
this
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 place, and the community
splitted
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 into two parts, situated in the north and southwestern side of the station.
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, over the
period
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 of 1883-1922, infrastructures,
such
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 as the Railway was built, which connected the eastern parts of the area to
west
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the west
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, and the community
enlarged
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nearly triple, than 1868-1883 timeframe.
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, during the year of 1970-1994, the
populations
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population
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 significantly increased and was widely dispersed throughout the area. To facilitate them, the Motorway was added in 1970, which connects the southern and northern
part
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parts
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 to the Main Road. To summarise,
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 the population increased over time in the Chorleywood village, new infrastructure was erected to enhance the communication of residents.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population growth
  • geographical features
  • 19th century
  • construction
  • public buildings
  • railways
  • infrastructure
  • economic activities
  • housing developments
  • commercial zones
  • environmental concerns
  • deforestation
  • traffic
  • urban sprawl
  • notable architecture
  • landmarks
  • urbanization
  • expansion
  • modernization
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