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The table below gives information about the daily cost of water per person in five different countries.

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The table compares the daily cost of water per person in five different countries-
Tanzania
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, Uganda, Pakistan, the UK, and the US-, measured in US
dollar
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dollars
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 and percentage.
Overall
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, it is evident that people in
Tanzania
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 not only pay more
money
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 for water but
also
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the
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that the
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money
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 made up the largest share of their
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wage
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wages
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 compared to other countries.
By contrast
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, consumers in the US pay little
money
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, representing the smallest proportion of their income in comparison with others. In terms of the daily cost of water per person,
Tanzania
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 records the highest price at 6.4
cents
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, followed by Uganda at 4.1
cents
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.
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, Pakistan and the UK consumers together pay 3.06
cents
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 daily. Meanwhile, the US consumers pay almost moderate
money
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 at 0.85
cents
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. With regard
the
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to the
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 cost as
percentage
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a percentage
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 of
average
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the average
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 daily
wage
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, a similar trend
cand
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can
 be observed there.
Tanzania
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 again represents the largest proportion of average income at 5.7%.
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following
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this
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, Uganda registers the second-highest share of average
wage
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 at 3.2%.
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by
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By
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 contrast, the US shares
considerable
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apply
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the lowest percentage of average daily
wage
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 at 0.006%, representing the smallest share.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "by contrast".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tanzania, money, wage, cents with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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