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With the help of technology, students nowadays can learn more information and learn it more quickly. Do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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 that digital tools are becoming the best option for
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 to learn knowledeable information and flexibility .
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 essay completely agrees with
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 statement because learners get lots of free sources,
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and they
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 can discuss with all
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 of a country. By using modern advances in
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education,
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students
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 find lots of free sources
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such
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 as many books,websites,high profile teacher lectures.There are many websites
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 can get access
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 different kinds of books like academics book ,physics ,chemistry,biology,mathmatics and
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help the
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 poor children who cannot effort
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 of undergraduate lives rural areas
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 they cannot get a good teacher
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difficult math,for them
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 education is best ,
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 they can watch so many free lectures
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 great teachers
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 mobile phones for classes and
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 any math
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problems or
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 learn new
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lectures
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 online there are so many
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 to communicate with one student to another
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,
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 as facebook group,whatsup and messengers or zoom meeting.By using those apps or website learners can connect with all
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 of a country
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 they can discuss with others.Some
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students
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 use facebook for share
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notes
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 and upload short video which helps other weak
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 to solve
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 undergraduate can group work and share their own opinion by using
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 apps
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 it will boost their knowledge. In conclusion,innovation makes
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students life
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students' lives
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 very easier they can study without any payment or tutor and
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 build a great community where they discuss with all
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 in their class. So,I strongly agree with
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 statement.

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Make your main idea more clear in each body part. Put one clear point first, then explain it.
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Add more direct support for your ideas. Some examples are good, but they need to be more exact and easy to understand.
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Stay close to the question words: learn more information and learn it more quickly. Explain both parts in a full way.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words more carefully, like first, also, for example, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Break some long sentences into two shorter ones. This will make your meaning easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Check how ideas move from one sentence to the next. Some parts jump too fast.
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You clearly give your opinion in the introduction and conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear basic shape: introduction, two body parts, and conclusion.
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You use examples about free books, online lessons, and group talk, which help your ideas.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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