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The graph below shows the consumption and production of sugar in India from 2001 to 2011

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The line graph shows the consumption and production of
sugar
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 in India over the period of 10 years between 2001 and 2011.
Overall
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it is clear that
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While
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Sugar
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 Consumption slightly increased,
Sugar
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 Production fluctuated over the period time. The starting point of India
Sugar
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 Production was at 26 million tons in 2001.
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 figure slightly dropped to 24 and 22, in 2003 and 2005, respectively. After that,
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 trend experienced rapid growth to 18, and it achieved a peak of 32 in 2007. Afterwards, it rapidly declined to 19 in 2009.
Then
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this
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 trend slowly rose to 29 in 2011.
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, in India ,
Sugar
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 Consumption was at 22 in 2001, and
then
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 a slow growth to 23 in 2003. After that,
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 figure remained relatively stable in 2005. And it slowly climbed to 23 and 25 in 2007 and 2009, respectively. And
this
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 trend rose slightly to 27 in 2011.

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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapid" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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