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The diagram below shows the transport preferences among young people in Great Britain, the USA, Germany and France in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where necessary.

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The bar graph portrays the transport preferences in younger generations from varied nations.
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 with, we can see that leaving aside Germany, the most
prefered
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preferred
 method of transport is the car. Great
britain
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Britain
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 and
USA
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the USA
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 have the same percentage of people who
rather
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prefer
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 cars
than
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over
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 other
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vehicle
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vehicles
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. In Germany, people choose bikes and
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motorcycle
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motorcycles
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, almost the same
,
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;
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 in
adittion
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addition
,
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motorcycle is
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motorcycles are
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 the
less
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least
 popular
vehicle
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 in all countries except for the United States. In
great britain
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Great Britain
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, cars are the most used vehicles,
reading
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 a 60%
then
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 bycicle, with almost a 30% and the
less
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least
 used is the
motorcycle
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with
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, with
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 a 10% of bicycles drivers
to continue
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apply
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, there is a 20% of
motorcycle
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 owners. In conclusion, cars are the most popular
vehicle
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 in most of the countries, and motorcycles are the
less
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least
 used
vehicle
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 in general.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words vehicle, motorcycle with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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