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The diagram below shows the transport preferences among young people in Great Britain, the USA, Germany and France in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where necessary.

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The bar chart portrays the transport preferences of young people from 4 different countries: Great Britain,
The
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the
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 United States,
Germany
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 and France.
Overall
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,
car
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the car
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 was the most popular means of transport in all nations,
excepting
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except for
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Germany
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which
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, which
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 shows a tendency for biking as well;
while
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motorbike
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the motorbike
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 was the least popular
transportation
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means of transportation
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 in all countries,
excepting
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except for
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 the USA. Both
Germany
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 and the USA show great differences between transport means,
having
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with
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 sixty
percent
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per cent
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 of their youth choosing cars.
Moreover
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, in
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Germany
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Germany,
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 the percentage of people
transporting
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transported
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 by bicycle and car is roughly the same, around 40
percent
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per cent
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. In
regards
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regard
 to France, the vast majority
prefers
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prefer
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 moving by car, with nearly equally low percentages of motorbike and bicycle users. Generally, the youth of these countries show a high preference for automobiles, with
Germany
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 being the only nation whose younger citizens majorly choose biking.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words germany with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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