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Band 3.5

You recently moved to a new apartment and are facing some problems with your neighbours. Write a letter to the apartment manager describing the issues, explaining how they affect you, and suggesting what action should be taken.

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Dear Sir/ Madam I hope you are doing well. I regret to
you tell
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 that I am currently facing
couple
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a couple
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 of problems with my new neighbours. To Commense with the first problem, people across the road are making loud noises and playing music after 11:00 p.m
which
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 is causing trouble for the whole neighbourhood to sleep and which is
total
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 against the rules of
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society .
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, they are parking their
vehichle
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vehicle
 in front of our lawn
which
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 is totally not acceptable as we have
own
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our own
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that
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parking spot. I highly recommend
to take
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 strict action and
send
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 them a notice regarding
this
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 problem. If they
are
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still
not
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do not
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 adhere to the
rules
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rules,
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 we should call the society meeting and
have to
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terminate the lease. I appreciate
for
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the actions you will take. Thankyou Your truly, Ayush Shukla

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts, but add a bit more detail about how the noise and parking problem affect your day and sleep.
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Task response: Use a more polite formal style, for example 'I am writing to report' and 'I would be grateful if you could take action'.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your ideas are clear, but some sentences are too long. Split them into shorter ones.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use simple link words like 'First', 'Also', and 'Finally' to guide the reader more clearly.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Check the ending and greeting. Write 'Dear Sir or Madam' and 'Yours sincerely' or 'Yours faithfully' in the correct form.
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Task response: You cover the three main points: the problems, their effect, and the action you want.
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Task response: Your main purpose is clear from the start.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear beginning, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: You group the problems together and then give a solution.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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