Dear Sir/Madam
I am writing
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am disappointed with the customer service Fix capitalization
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Correct your spelling
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Write a letter to the shop manager. In your letter: describe the problem with the equipment explain what happened when you tried to use it say what you would like the manager to do
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task response
Write all three points. Say what the problem is, what happened, and what you want the manager to do.
task response
Add more clear detail. Now the letter is too short to fully answer the task.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clear order: problem first, then what happened, then your request.
coherence and cohesion
Write in full sentences and make one main idea in each paragraph.
task response
You started with a clear purpose: you are writing because you are not happy.
coherence and cohesion
You used a polite opening for a formal letter.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.
‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.
Examples:
I really want to study but I’m too tired.
I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.
If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.