You recently spent the Christmas vacation at the home of your college friend who lives in a different city. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter -thank your friend and his family for letting you stay with them and celebrating the festival -mention what you liked about being there -ask your friend to be your guest sometime

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Dear Karen, I hope
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letter finds you well. I am writing to express my heartfelt gratitude to you and your family for inviting me to celebrate Christmas
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, and
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allowing me to stay at home so warmly
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and without any hesitation. I have no words to describe how wonderful the experience was. The Christmas party that your family hosted was quite memorable. I especially loved the taste of Christmas pudding filled with fruits,
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the decorations of the entire hall with fresh flowers and lights.
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, I realised
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how
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this festival deeply
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deeply this festival
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reflects your culture
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and traditional celebrations. I would
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like to invite you to my home next month to celebrate my birthday. I would be delighted if you could come earlier
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my place to help me with arrangements
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and make
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event more memorable. I really hope that you
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come in advance. I am eagerly waiting to see you soon! Warm wishes, Sam

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task response
For task response: Say a bit more about why the visit was special for you.
task response
For task response: Your ask is clear, but you can ask your friend to stay with you sometime, not only for your birthday.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: Some long lines can be cut into shorter ones for better flow.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: Use simple link words like and, also, because, so.
task response
For task response: You thanked your friend and family clearly.
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For task response: You wrote about what you liked there with good detail.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: Greeting and closing are polite and clear.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
Topic Vocabulary:
  • warm welcome
  • kind family
  • Christmas dinner
  • beautiful lights
  • happy time
  • feel at home
  • different city
  • good memories
  • please visit me
  • my guest
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