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The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph illustrates changes in the amount and type of junk food consumed by
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 teenagers from 1975 to 2000.
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, fish and chips had the lowest decrease in all time, in the end period.
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, pizza had a gradual rise in consumers
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 the
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 of the period. Humbergers had a period of stability from the
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 of the time until the end. First of all, in 1975, Fish and chips were the highest eaters with 100%,
five
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years
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 later, they declined to nearly above 80%.
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, they had a slight increase to under 100%. From 1985 to
1995
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1995,
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 they went down gradually to in the
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 between 60% and 40%.
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, they showed a gradual dip with under 40%. By 1975, Humbergers started with
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a rate
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 above 0%. From 1975 to 1985 they
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rose
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 gradually to nearly 80%,
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 later, they had a stable increase
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in the
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 between 100% and 80%. By 1995 , they increased slightly to 100%
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 they remained the same
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until the year of 2000.
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 the first
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time, pizza was nealy 0%,
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 later, it rose to under 20%. By 1985, it went up gradually
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, with
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 in the
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 between 40% and 20%. From 1990 to 1995, it
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 a significant rise to above 100%
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five
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years
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 later, it remained the same at above 100%.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words middle, five, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • trends
  • consumption
  • type of fast food
  • popularity
  • peaked
  • hit a low
  • timeline
  • notable
  • switch
  • cultural trends
  • economic factors
  • marketing efforts
  • increase
  • decrease
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