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The table below shows the proportion of income spent on 4 common items in the UK in 1998.

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The table compares the proportion
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money
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of money
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 spent on
four
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 different
items
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 in
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UK
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the UK
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 in 1998. It is evident that the highest percentage of
money
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spent
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was spent
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 on music and videos in 1998. The figure for
money
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 spent on electronic equipment was the lowest in the given year. In terms of spending, adults
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spent 36% on
four
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 common
items
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 in the
UK
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 in 1998. The figure for men was spend 14% food, 5% electronic equipment, music 5%, and 2% on videos.
While
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 the proportion of
money
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 spent on
four
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items
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 in the
UK
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 was 45.5 in women in 1998. Regarding the remaining
for
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four
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items
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, the figure for
money
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 spent
in
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on
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 children and boys on
four
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items
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, it was
same
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the same
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 for 83% in
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UK
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the UK
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 in 1998. The girls spent on
four
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items
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 was 73% in the
UK
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 in
1998
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1998,
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 respectively.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words money, four, items, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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