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The line graphs show wheat exports in Australia, Canada and European Community Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The presented line graph illustrates the comparison in the
exportment
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export
 of
wheat
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 in
Australia
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,
Canada
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 and
European
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the European
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 Community over a-6-year
period
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 from 1985 to 1990.
Overall
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, the amount of
wheat
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exports
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 in
Canada
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 and
European
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the European
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 Community both climbed slightly over the
period
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,
while
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the
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apply
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Australia's
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Australia
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 faced a steady fall.
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,
wheat
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exports
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 in
Canada
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, which reached
to
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the highest point of the graph-25
millions
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 of
wheat
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tonnes
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 in 1988,
was
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were
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 the most significant change.
According to
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 the chart, the number of
wheat
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exports
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 in
Canada
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 dropped slightly from around 18,5 to 16,5
millions
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tonnes
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 between 1985 and 1986. And soon
then
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, there was a substantial growth by around 8,5
million
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 units in
wheat
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exports
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 over a-2-year
period
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 from 1986 to 1988 before
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falling again.
Wheat
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exports
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 in
Australia
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 witnessed a quick decline by over 10
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millions
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million
tonnes
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 in the following year. Between 1989 and 1990,
wheat
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exports
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 increased gradually from around 14 to around 19
million
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 units. The amount of
wheat
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exports
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 in
European
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the European
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 Community seemed similar but more stable. There was a slight decline
by
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of
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 around 3
million
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 units from 1985 to 1986. The figure
then
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 went up slowly by just around 1
million
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 tonne for the next 2 years before increasing again more substantially.
Wheat
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exports
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 rose considerably from about 15 to approximately 21
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millions
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million
tonnes
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 during a
period
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 of 3 years
betweeb
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between
 1988 and 1990. Regarding
Australia
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's data, there was a slow rise from 1985 to 1986. Throughout a-5-year
period
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 between 1986 and 1990,
Australia
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's
wheat
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exports
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 witnessed a steady
went down
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decline
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 from around 16 to 11
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millions
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million
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tonnes
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words wheat, australia, canada, period, exports, millions, tonnes, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "substantial" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • trends
  • fluctuations
  • decline
  • rise
  • surpass
  • modest growth
  • significant
  • stability
  • comparisons
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